They ask why you both broke up.
They talk About how perfect you both were.
You close your eyes and a million memories flash through them .
How she stayed up late for you and how she understood you without having to say a word. How you thought about her in the middle of the day and how she smiled when you got her something. How she lightened your whole, how she was your escape from life, how it felt to hold her close, how you promised yourself to never let her alone. Even how you single handedly destroyed it all, how you couldn’t make time for her anymore. how helpless you felt, how she said she’s had enough and How everything was slipping right off your hands.
You know you should’ve tried a little harder, fought a little more for her.
You know you shouldn’t have let her walk away , you should’ve chased her like crazy. But you did not. Instead, you let her walk off. You remember her disappointed face and open your eyes. Run a hand through your hair and just say “the distance killed us” in a thick voice.
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Nice one. Even your prose has flavor of poetry.
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Haha I guess xD Thank you!!
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Oh, the power of the written word. Your creativity and diversity astound me. Once again you have inspired me and taught me how to become a better writer. Powerful story. Thank you!
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I am smiling. Thank you so
Much for your sweet and kind words! And I try ! So glad you liked it!
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It is a nice story thou
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Oh god! Boy’s point of view…. I think my heart might break!! 😭
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Hahaha mine was breaking too! Thank you!
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I love your blog 😀
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Aww wow thank you so much!
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Glad to find your page, had a good time going through most of yours posts. Would like you to check out my page too :)x
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Glad you liked them! And sure I will 🙂
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Thank you and sure I will!
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Thanks a lot x
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This was a really nice work. Kudos.
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This is beautiful..
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Short and pithy.
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Thank you!
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so pretty and so sad. Would have been nice if it had been longer. My husband and I started out as a long distance relationship (we lived ten hours apart), and it was hard, but we made it. Makes me sad for your characters. Keep up the good work! And thanks for liking my blog.
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I think the really magic of it is in the fact that it is short. But maybe next time? Wow that is a real challenge! So happy you guys made it! Thank you!
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Oh man…what a gut punch that was. 😦
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It worked then 😉
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Well written!!!! Looking forward to reading your posts!!!!!
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Thank you! One s coming right up!
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Imagine a old wagon wheel perpendicular to the ground on an axle. During a normal single life it justs goes the easiest speed. If you run into an emotional happening the wheel starts to go faster having the problem sliding out on the spokes going to the outer wheel rim. If the emotion can’t be controlled the wheel starts to go faster and the emotions become uncontrolled and spits on the passing people so then they become involved trying to solve this emotional upset.
If this problem is between loved ones the invested time and caring the wheel will continue to go faster and before you know it all your emotions have disappeared with nothing left to continue on because the wheel shot off the axle never again to be seen. Did you read all this?? If you did you have a lot of stamina. I almost always write short poems, stories and especially replies —smile—
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Nice story! All your own work? I can learn a lot from you for sure. Keep up the good work. 😉
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Thank you! Yes, all the writings here are my own. I will 😉 loads Coming in soon! Hope you enjoy!
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I will be back then. 🙂
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Amazing story!
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Thank you!!
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Amazing….
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This is the power of words. To be able to convey something so profound through limited words..it moved me. Beautiful work.
Here’s hoping you’ll check out my blog too. 🙂
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Oh powerful little things those are..words. So glad you liked it! Thank you for stopping by! I’ll check it out for sure.
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It was an absolute pleasure. 🙂
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Beautiful piece of writing. I struggle trying to create short stories. You did a great job. Is this introducing a longer piece?
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Oh I am sorry , I found this in my spam. Nope I like it like this but yes it could be the introduction to something huge. Thank you! So glad you think I did well !
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Yeah, I am the Lonely SpamMan. I had to reread this piece. Don’t be afraid to turn this into something bigger.
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Beautiful!
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Thank you! 🙂
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So relatable 🙂
(https://inkyquillblog.wordpress.com)
Link to my blog! Greetings 🙂
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Thanks 🙂
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Uh huh. You ve got facebook BTW?
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he he… I am calm… I was asking if that what you meant!
DOn’t worry… I am calm and cool!
Yeah this thing what you just said is absolutely true… We do sometimes are able to express things with text rather than in real… but the effect of real is much more deeper than the virtual…trust me on that…(well and that deep can be either good or bad…can’t tell exactly what it’s gonna be)
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Agreed! No matter what you do real things are the best! Technology and artificial stuff can never comepare to it!
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I died….. They are the primitive ways we started everything
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ummm…never felt like using it…
see… its like… the one I liked were already taken and I usually have a really different approach to approach a girl… coz this one is though smart to some extent but kinda cheesy and for sure quite old!
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and moreover….
as I always say…
Good Ones Are Always Already Taken…
so there’s ur answer for why never used!
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Its gone so old its boring now! Soo approaching a girl behind the screen is easier huh?
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Can you elaborate more on behind the screen thing?
You mean it’s better in real life than virtual?
Is that what you asking?
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I m saying it easier virtual than real life. Don’t mean to offend you. Just stating a fact. Its said that most people say things in texts they won’t in real. Calm down
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Like a kid?
Umm…maybe u are… Who knows!
How old are u? And please don’t write that -” ladki se age nai puchtey” wali line!
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Like the toddler kinda kid is what I meant. And yes I am on the younger part of the age list yet. Only people tpo young or aunties too old have problems telling their age. Anyways I am 17 how old are you?
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You’re just 17?
Well then you’re a kid to me I guess…
I am 21…
See…as I said before,,,it depends…
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I ve got too many friends of your age to be honest. I told you I am young…*shrugs*
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Well… Then…
I take my words back…
Should I greet you like a normal guy does to a girl?
“Oh hello beautiful… How are ya? Did I hurt when you fell from heaven?”
(lol…..I’ve literally never said that to any girl or even a guy…. So o thought why not try for once)
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Hahahaha I have millions on comeback on that but I am gonna let that pass as an atempt ! (Srsly though never use it…ever!)
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If am not wrong…this kinda looks like a Prose Poetry…. I mean it do have internal rhyming in it in some lines…
Is it?
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I guess? I think that’s just for a cool effect of words….so what is your judgment mister?
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You want my honest opinion?
There are few and really few mistakes I guess….
I am no expert in English but I thought there was…
Wait let me point it out…
1. Run a hand through youR hair(I guess u missed a ‘r’)
2. How she lightened your whole ____.(I guess u missed to write ‘world’)
3. Dint( don’t make short cuts… U are blogging my dear,,,not having chat with me and Aaliyah…lol….don’t mind my saying like this okay?)
4. Some wrong use punctuations… Like- there should be comma after- ….you open your eyes, run a hand…. Not a full stop….
And rest as I said before…there was a use of internal rhyme but well u didn’t notice that…coz u know what…u used it pretty nicely!
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Hahaha thank you so Much for this!! See that’s what I am talking bout! Honest stuff! I m gonna rectify them and can know what my mistakes are right? ! Thank you so much dude! For the taking time out and everything!
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You’re welcome peaches! 😄
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Why peaches! *cringes*
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Oh… Umm… I am used to say such words…
Dear, peaches, sweet pea, milady and many other like these!
U found them cheesy? Well some girls do… Coz if u do too…well sorry then!
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Hahahaha I m laughing again! No honey its not cheesy! Relax! I just asked why peach! Makes me sound like a kid!
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Long distance is so hard!
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Dammit.. this kills me. Well-written :’)
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Hahaha thank you 🙂
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Reblogged this on wwwpalfitness.
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Thank you!
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That was pretty much awesome. I would like you to visit mine.
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Thanks! Sure I’ll check it out 🙂
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Bravo Jade! (It’s Jamie…Lori’s less attentive blogger:)
Keep on writing girl! Really nice job
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Hahaha I know you Jamie! Thank you so much!! BTW hey! Did u stalk lori n my chat hahaha (Pst its okay if u did xD)
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Hi,
It’s Janice from Mostly Blogging. Do you have a “like” button? I would have pressed it.
Janice
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Hey janics , hank you so Much! Hopefully my “like” button is working fine xD
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Very well written, It’s a real show of you skill how you communicate so much with a few words
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Thank you so much for stopping by and reading my work. Means a lot ! 😀
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Whew! This is fantastic, Jade! The brevity of it is intriguing. You could use this as a great jumping off point for something larger in the future. For this, though, there is just enough to leave the reader wanting more. There’s just enough hurt, and regret, and “might have been.” I love the closing…very well done.
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Oh my god Lori I am grinning so hard! I am so happy you liked it! Thank you Soo much!!! Haha it was just i wanted to try something new xD
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Keep on keeping on! It was wonderful.
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Thank you Lori!!
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